Some months ago, I began a crowd funding project through Pozible to have my novel "Gifts of the Peramangk" reviewed by two of the United States most recognized books review journals - Kirkus and the San Francisco Book Review. Both journals offer a sponsored review service where, for a fee, you can submit your work and have it reviewed by a 'professional reviewer' which you can then have published and use in promotional material going forward.
There has been a debate around paid book reviews going on across the internet for a while. I weighed up the pros and cons of that debate and decided that by being transparent in my decision to pay for a review, there could be little criticism in that decision. In any case, the crowd funding project was successful and I was able to submit to both publications.
The turn around time for the reviews from both Kirkus and the San Francisco Book Review was always going to take a while. It was a couple of months from the time I submitted. In the past couple of weeks, both reviews have come in for the book and the results are - interesting - to say the least.
I have wrestled with what to do about the Kirkus review, in particular. However, after giving long consideration to it and talking with a couple of people involved in the project, I have decided to share both reviews here.
First up is the Kirkus review:
In Mayes’ (The Hambledown Dream, 2010) novel, a young aboriginal girl fights to pursue her extraordinary talent for the violin in spite of the racism and violence that have dogged her family for generations. In the 20th century, Australian welfare agencies forcibly removed many children from their homes and families under the pretext of “assimilation.” Virginia Crammond is one of them, taken from her mother in 1951 and made a ward of the state. She lives as a virtual slave to a sadistic landed farmer who beats his help with whips and axe handles.
From there, the narrative hops forward several decades to the present day, where Virginia is a tough but tired matriarch with a glass eye and an unspeakably cruel past. She has a family that’s barely hanging together, as she and the rest of the Delfeys live in bleak governmental housing in the suburbs of Adelaide, South Australia. A drug dealer has raped and murdered Virginia’s daughter, and her grandson Jeremy is slipping into gang life. Meanwhile, her alcoholic son Rex beats his wife, terrorizes his children and, just to complete the checklist of blight, gambles too much. In these brutal circumstances, Virginia’s 8-year-old granddaughter Ruby finds solace in music, just as her grandmother did, and with the same violin. Ruby sneaks off to a nearby conservatory to eavesdrop on rehearsing performers and copy their classical renditions. The story alternates between the past and present, revealing how Virginia was taught to play by the wife of the Pastoralist—the landowner who’s such a caricature of evil that he doesn't even receive a name.
A music professor soon recognizes Ruby’s talent, granting her the opportunity to compete for a scholarship at a prestigious music recital. Mayes’ portrayal of Ruby’s love of music gives her character a solid core. However, the rest of the characters feel more like victim archetypes than people, and the villains all but twirl their mustaches. The story also suffers from a stylistic choice to leave no verb unmodified; on a single page, characters “whispered fearfully,” “snapped chillingly” and, oddest of all, “queried…malevolently.”
An uneven novel that reads like a sociology textbook crossed with a soap opera.
And here is the review from the San Francisco Book Review;
Gifts of the Peramangk
By Dean Mayes
Central Avenue Publishing, $15.95, 334 pages, Format: eBook
Star Rating: 3.5 out of 5
The Delfey family is struggling. Rex, the nominal head of the family, takes part-time work when he can find it and drinks the rest of the time, terrorizing his family. His wife, Belle, works successive twelve-hour shifts that leave her exhausted with little time to do more than sleep. His mother, Virginia, is slowly slipping, becoming inattentive and absent-minded. His oldest son, Jeremy, is angry all the time and has gotten involved with a local gang. His niece, Ruby, doesn't understand why her aunt and uncle dislike her and worries about what will happen when her grandmother and guardian Virginia can't take care of her any longer.
It all comes down to history. A happy child in an aboriginal family, Virginia, was taken from her mother on the slimmest of pretexts by the Aborigines Welfare Board and delivered to "the Pastoralist" on a remote farm, essentially becoming a slave. Homesick and afraid, Virginia finds her only solace in violin lessons given to her by the Pastoralist's wife. Fifty years later, she relives these memories as she teaches Ruby, who has inherited her musical talents. Ruby is the heir to all this history, its sorrows and gifts, and she will be the one to save the family when her musical virtuosity lands her the chance of a lifetime.
I knew little about the history of Australia and was fascinated—and more than a little disheartened—to learn about the country's treatment of aboriginals and ongoing racism. Mayes's characters inspire sympathy, and I kept reading to learn more about them. The diction, however, made reading //Gifts of the Peramangk// difficult. Eight-year-old impoverished Ruby often speaks like an educated adult, as do the other children. The slang is jarring and awkward when used and detracts from the plot.
That said, I finished the book feeling uplifted and grateful for the Australian history lesson.
It goes without saying that I am hugely disappointed with the Kirkus review but, at the same time, I am not totally surprised by it. As I have said previously, Kirkus have a reputation for being particularly harsh in their reviews and, as it turns out, their treatment my novel was no different.
However, I do feel that their review was particularly harsh, bordering on being "cruel" and it offers nothing constructive to me as an author which I can take forward into future writing - something I feel a reviewer has a responsibility to do.
For those of you who have not read "Gifts of the Peramangk" however, I would ask you to consider the body of reviews that have been posted for the novel at Amazon - where the majority of the reviews reside.
You might ask why it is that I've decided to go public with the Kirkus review here. Well, I think there is some value in sharing the results of my endeavor despite the result and again, I felt that I had a responsibility - in view of my commitment to transparency - to share them. I am hoping that it might have some value as a discussion topic. My audience is undoubtedly quite a lot smaller than Kirkus in particular, so I don't feel as though there is any great risk in sharing it.
At this point, I have decided to publish the SFBR review at the San Francisco Book Review and I've been advised that it will appear in that publication's June issue. I feel that the SFBR review contains enough positives to make it worth publishing.
As for the Kirkus review - at this point, I have not yet given the go ahead for it to be published by Kirkus. As I said earlier, it offers nothing constructive. Rather, it is more a vicious take down of my work. It doesn't serve me anything of value nor, I would argue, does it cast Kirkus in a very good light. I would be interested in hearing what you think.
The project I undertook, was always going to have some risk in terms of the outcome. But I believe that by posting the outcome, I can rest now. I have seen the project through and I can move forward.
DFA.
Sunday, May 4, 2014
Wednesday, April 23, 2014
First Look - Underworld's Daughter by Molly Ringle.
Seattle based author and fellow Central Avenue Publishing alum Molly Ringle took her impressive writing career in a new direction in 2013 with the release of the first entry in her Chrysomelia Stories. Titled Persephone's Orchard, Molly delved into a rich body of classic Greek mythology to craft a compelling tale that was seated in the mythic world of the Greek Gods while simultaneously criss-crossing into the present day world of her protagonist, the earnest and otherwise "normal" Sophie Darrow - young woman on the cusp of university life in the Pacific Northwest.
I remarked in my own pre-release feature for Persephone's Orchard, that Molly Ringle had stepped out of her comfort zone to craft a thrilling story that combined elements of that classic mythology, action, adventure and romance that was grounded in the present day Pacific Northwest that Ringle has portrayed in a number of her titles with great affection.
A follow up novel was always on the cards, and I was given the distinct privilege of being a part of the beta team of readers on that follow up project, the labors of which are now about to bear fruit.
The team at Central Avenue Publishing are very pleased and proud to present the cover for Molly Ringle's new novel and the second in the Chrysomelia Stories: Underworld's Daughter.
The story for Sophie Darrow (Persephone) and Adrian Watts (Hades) continues with their war against the evil Thanatos. But now a new character enters the story - Hekate.
The tree of immortality discovered by Persephone and Hades opens the door for the creation of new immortals. But with their new joys come their darkest sorrows yet.
Long ago in ancient Greece, the evil cult Thanatos destroyed nearly all the immortals. In the modern day, those heartbreaking memories bring Sophie Darrow to her knees. At the same time, the pressure of juggling university studies, a worried family, an immortal boyfriend, and a cult set on murdering him is crushing her. But she cannot give up, for this time the lives of all her loved ones are at stake. And even the gods can't save everyone.
Having had the opportunity to beta read the manuscript whilst in development, Underworld's Daughter promises to deliver what every good sequel should - a strong continuation of the characters, a greater intensity to the story telling and much more adventure. The cross currents between the mythical realms and our own present-day world are expertly balanced with each feeding off one another to drive the story forward.
If you like stories of Greek mythology, a bit of paranormal & true love and a lot of action - you'll love this series. Underworld's Daughter is due for an international release in July across both print and digital formats, but in the lead up to the release, Molly and Central Avenue Publishing have partnered with Goodreads to offer a lucky reader the opportunity to pick up an advance copy. Enter to win the competition at Goodreads here.
Molly Ringle is the author of several novels including the award winning The Ghost Downstairs, Relatively Honest, and What Scotland Taught Me. She is best known for winning the Bulwer-Lytton Prize in 2010, which is a tongue-in-cheek contest sponsored by San Jose State University. Entrants are invited to compose the opening sentence to the worst of all possible novels – that is, deliberately bad. The contest is named for English novelist Edward George Bulwer-Lytton, author of the much-quoted first line, “It was a dark and stormy night.”
Enter the Goodreads sweepstakes here.
Connect with Molly Ringle here.
Tweet with Molly Ringle here.
DFA.
I remarked in my own pre-release feature for Persephone's Orchard, that Molly Ringle had stepped out of her comfort zone to craft a thrilling story that combined elements of that classic mythology, action, adventure and romance that was grounded in the present day Pacific Northwest that Ringle has portrayed in a number of her titles with great affection.
A follow up novel was always on the cards, and I was given the distinct privilege of being a part of the beta team of readers on that follow up project, the labors of which are now about to bear fruit.
The team at Central Avenue Publishing are very pleased and proud to present the cover for Molly Ringle's new novel and the second in the Chrysomelia Stories: Underworld's Daughter.
image credit: Central Avenue Publishing.
The story for Sophie Darrow (Persephone) and Adrian Watts (Hades) continues with their war against the evil Thanatos. But now a new character enters the story - Hekate.
The tree of immortality discovered by Persephone and Hades opens the door for the creation of new immortals. But with their new joys come their darkest sorrows yet.
Long ago in ancient Greece, the evil cult Thanatos destroyed nearly all the immortals. In the modern day, those heartbreaking memories bring Sophie Darrow to her knees. At the same time, the pressure of juggling university studies, a worried family, an immortal boyfriend, and a cult set on murdering him is crushing her. But she cannot give up, for this time the lives of all her loved ones are at stake. And even the gods can't save everyone.
Having had the opportunity to beta read the manuscript whilst in development, Underworld's Daughter promises to deliver what every good sequel should - a strong continuation of the characters, a greater intensity to the story telling and much more adventure. The cross currents between the mythical realms and our own present-day world are expertly balanced with each feeding off one another to drive the story forward.
If you like stories of Greek mythology, a bit of paranormal & true love and a lot of action - you'll love this series. Underworld's Daughter is due for an international release in July across both print and digital formats, but in the lead up to the release, Molly and Central Avenue Publishing have partnered with Goodreads to offer a lucky reader the opportunity to pick up an advance copy. Enter to win the competition at Goodreads here.
Molly Ringle is the author of several novels including the award winning The Ghost Downstairs, Relatively Honest, and What Scotland Taught Me. She is best known for winning the Bulwer-Lytton Prize in 2010, which is a tongue-in-cheek contest sponsored by San Jose State University. Entrants are invited to compose the opening sentence to the worst of all possible novels – that is, deliberately bad. The contest is named for English novelist Edward George Bulwer-Lytton, author of the much-quoted first line, “It was a dark and stormy night.”
Enter the Goodreads sweepstakes here.
Connect with Molly Ringle here.
Tweet with Molly Ringle here.
DFA.
Monday, April 21, 2014
Pieces of Broken Time by Lorenz Font - Cover Reveal & Preview.
PRESENTS. . .
Cover Reveal for
Pieces of Broken Time
by
Lorenz Font
Release Date: July 24, 2014
Summary:
When wounded soldier Blake Connor returns from Afghanistan, he wants nothing more than to hide from the world. He’s plagued by the memory of his best friend’s death and the pain of his own injuries. On top of all that, he has another burden to carry.
Take care of our girl.
Blake’s vow to watch over the woman who was left behind is overshadowed by his self-contempt and bitterness, making it impossible for him to reach out to her like he’d promised.
Jennifer Owens had expected to get married the moment her fiancé returned home from the war, but the news of his death changed everything. Shattered by her loss, she is still struggling with feelings of guilt when she receives an unexpected letter that raises new questions and reopens old wounds.
Jennifer’s need for answers leads her to Blake’s doorstep, but she is met with hostility and rejection from a man who only vaguely resembles the head-turning charmer she remembers from so long ago. Blake is determined to keep her at arm’s length, and Jennifer soon discovers that she must decide whether to push back or let him go.
Caught up in circumstances beyond their control, Jennifer and Blake have to learn to accept the truths that lie below the surface. She comes to recognize the beauty underneath the scars, and Blake realizes that he’s broken in more ways than he cares to admit.
Nothing will ever be the same for this ex-Army Ranger once he faces the truth. If he can learn to accept the help he needs, he might be able to overcome his warped self-image and emotional scars. To be the man Jennifer deserves, he must heal his wounds before he loses the woman he loves forever.
“What is this?” She traced one finger along the shape of the body art.
“It’s Trent’s dog tag,” he whispered.
“Why are you wearing his name?”
“It is tribute to a brave man and a friend.”
His gaze was unwavering, so intense that she shuddered. When she didn’t say a word, his voice was filled with uncertainty.
“Am I disgusting you?”
Jennifer shook her head and spoke in a firm voice.
“I love everything about you. This . . .” She traced a finger on the raised skin. “Is what makes you, you. I would never ask for anything more.”
She lowered her mouth to kiss each scar, feeling his breath hitching with every touch of her lips.
He cupped her face and planted a kiss on her lips. “I want to be perfect for you.”
About the Author:
Lorenz Font discovered her love of writing after reading a celebrated novel that inspired one idea after another. She is currently enjoying the buzz from her vampire novels Hunted and Tormented, the first and second book of The Gates Legacy trilogy, Indivisible Line, a romantic thriller, and Feather Light, an erotic romance.
Lorenz’s perfect day consists of writing and lounging on her garage couch, aka the office, with a glass of her favourite cabernet while listening to her ever-growing music collection. She enjoys dabbling in different genres, with an intense focus on angst and the redemption of flawed characters. Her fascination with romantic twists is a mainstay in all her stories.
Lorenz lives in California with her husband, children, and two demanding dogs. She divides her time between her full-time job as a hospital office manager and her busy writing schedule.
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