tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post9152236272545337202..comments2024-03-15T01:25:39.204-07:00Comments on Dean from Australia: Serenna.DeanfromAustraliahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12292995600982621329noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-28124335004086565192011-03-24T19:34:45.987-07:002011-03-24T19:34:45.987-07:00This is beautiful, and compelling. The imagery jus...This is beautiful, and compelling. The imagery just sucks you right into the story. Great job!Nichole Chasehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00688118167705778560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-17413659501194166402011-03-12T11:06:29.424-08:002011-03-12T11:06:29.424-08:00As you should be! I would really look into finding...As you should be! I would really look into finding it a home in a lit journal. Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-53048862231524960212011-03-12T05:10:01.374-08:002011-03-12T05:10:01.374-08:00Ok...LM...let me just geek out here for a moment.....Ok...LM...let me just geek out here for a moment...<br /><br />... (dfa is actually squealing like a girl right now. Lisa Marie Stull read my post!!)<br /><br />Okay! I'm back! <br /><br />Yeah - when I started this piece, I actually had no idea where it was going to end up. I had no conclusion to it because my nightmare ended right at the point at which the horse passes by. It wasn't until I was at work the other night and it was all quiet, with the machines all around me that it hit me. The protagonist is actually in a controlled coma in an ICU.<br /><br />Once I knew that, I went back and analyzed each sentence in turn, looking for ways to drop hints into the story line that may or may not tip the reader off. <br /><br />I'm also really drawn to the visceral experience of a character, describing the physical reactions one has to a moment. Some times I might go a little overboard with it, so it's definitely a balancing act to keep the descriptors subtle yet powerful.<br /><br />I'm actually really proud of this piece.DeanfromAustraliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12292995600982621329noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-30275752683714012052011-03-11T17:53:48.105-08:002011-03-11T17:53:48.105-08:00Dean.....This. Is. FANTASTIC. I am actually workin...Dean.....This. Is. FANTASTIC. I am actually working on a short story this week myself that involves a dream, not a real one, but a dream nonetheless.<br /><br />This piece is disturbingly beautiful. It is evident that each sentence, each passage, was carefully constructed in a manner as to hold the reader hostage. I couldn't tear myself away. I found my breathing becoming staggered with the character. I too willed myself to a calm as he did. In the end, the reader feels as though they themselves experienced this.<br /><br />BRAVO, my friend, bravo!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-55049002502204397432011-03-10T13:49:14.249-08:002011-03-10T13:49:14.249-08:00Thank you Heather for stopping by and reading this...Thank you Heather for stopping by and reading this piece. I've had a very rough version of notes on this piece for a while. It actually evolved out of an extremely vivid nightmare I had last year in which the final scene involving the elephant and the horse was core. When I woke up, I was so disturbed by the dream I wrote it down with a view to maybe trying to seek some explanation for it. <br /><br />I was in the mood this week to elaborate it and turn it into Serenna. This was the result. <br /><br />Again, thank you for stopping by. I do enjoy your visits.DeanfromAustraliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12292995600982621329noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-53477684512997596022011-03-10T10:46:05.451-08:002011-03-10T10:46:05.451-08:00Beautifully written and I LOVE the pictures you pr...Beautifully written and I LOVE the pictures you provided for imagery!Heatherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05130733681254163610noreply@blogger.com