tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post7051191573875088393..comments2024-03-28T23:26:50.395-07:00Comments on Dean from Australia: Gifts Of The Peramangk - WIP Preview No.1.DeanfromAustraliahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12292995600982621329noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-44715653122974897342011-04-26T11:26:18.518-07:002011-04-26T11:26:18.518-07:00Sad and gripping! Your detail really paints a pict...Sad and gripping! Your detail really paints a picture in my mind. Great work!Virginia is for lovershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03310309145331553460noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-49016455852916672182011-04-23T05:47:46.426-07:002011-04-23T05:47:46.426-07:00I think dialogue is your strength, Dean. You'r...I think dialogue is your strength, Dean. You're off to a good start. 30,000 words is about where I am on my current historical mystery novel.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-70825897400787110182011-04-21T15:39:43.879-07:002011-04-21T15:39:43.879-07:00I loved your descriptions, Dean. You paint the pic...I loved your descriptions, Dean. You paint the picture beautifully. Such a tragic tale, and you are starting it wonderfully. My attention is grabbed in the beginning, and you get a sense of the normal happy life the child has. Then it's ripped away, it breaks your heart. I see a tear jerker in the works here...V.K. Tremainhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09292556216522683370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-32694097449910189492011-04-20T12:36:18.295-07:002011-04-20T12:36:18.295-07:00You have such a wonderful way with description. I ...You have such a wonderful way with description. I could almost smell the warm air and grass around the watering hole. I hate that the preview stopped here! I need to know what happens to Virginia.Nichole Chasehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00688118167705778560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-71329989970550185542011-04-20T09:58:37.458-07:002011-04-20T09:58:37.458-07:00So, so good Dean, I can't wait to read more......So, so good Dean, I can't wait to read more...Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08269600637980203783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-71371570421204853062011-04-20T07:00:10.197-07:002011-04-20T07:00:10.197-07:00Such strong description! Great job. And, a very go...Such strong description! Great job. And, a very good setup to what I think is a very compelling story.Michelle Mutohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17838640384993059492noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-63879384714894578572011-04-19T14:14:45.168-07:002011-04-19T14:14:45.168-07:00@Cee - Thank you! for stopping by - it means a lot...@Cee - Thank you! for stopping by - it means a lot to me. What you've read here in this opening piece is very much based on factual accounts of Aboriginal children being forcibly removed from their families during an era of Australian history known by the rather ominous title of the White Australia Policy. This actually happened all across our nation in an effort to assimilate the black population into the "mainstream" and wrought incredible damage on those who were subject to it. You'll see how much damage it had done to Virginia as I work on the manuscript.DeanfromAustraliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12292995600982621329noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-59621785978662897922011-04-19T13:40:41.107-07:002011-04-19T13:40:41.107-07:00@Anita - lolz! In my mind it was funny. Hope you c...@Anita - lolz! In my mind it was funny. Hope you can come back to it.DeanfromAustraliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12292995600982621329noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-89887990611441561342011-04-19T13:07:07.409-07:002011-04-19T13:07:07.409-07:00Ah, just lovely, Dean. So sad and poignant. I feel...Ah, just lovely, Dean. So sad and poignant. I feel so much for this little girl. Such a vivid character already. Well done, guy.Carolina M. Valdez Schneiderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11589934533051907801noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-86446419171639436032011-04-19T12:52:49.634-07:002011-04-19T12:52:49.634-07:00I'm running out the door and didn't have t...I'm running out the door and didn't have time for the whole thing...only time to say that my favorite part was when the girl says "Bloody hell!" Probably not helpful. Will come back later if can find the place. :)Anitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06333494452915600562noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-23844457675590765052011-04-19T07:11:26.707-07:002011-04-19T07:11:26.707-07:00Thanks so much Anne - but I think you sell yoursel...Thanks so much Anne - but I think you sell yourself way short because I have found your character descriptions especially vivid.DeanfromAustraliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12292995600982621329noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-62308057901547279112011-04-19T06:33:21.607-07:002011-04-19T06:33:21.607-07:00Dean, I love it. I think one of your biggest talen...Dean, I love it. I think one of your biggest talents as a writer is showing the reader what people look like. I think it impresses me so much because I struggle with it! Great job. Keep working.Anne Rileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15142671531881407934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1786573611032564530.post-5082952371441547752011-04-18T12:28:32.332-07:002011-04-18T12:28:32.332-07:00Wow! I really enjoyed it and want to know more abo...Wow! I really enjoyed it and want to know more about what happens to Virginia! I am intrigued by the story and can't wait to read the rest of it. You certainly have a gift for writing and a way with words. Your vivid description of the scene in the beginning took me to this foreign place on a beach far in the past. Keep up the good work and let me know when you publish it!mamabearhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10080043954601659931noreply@blogger.com